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A wavering young pagan occultist is forced to choose between the love of her life or ultimate power, ensuing violent and disturbing consequences.
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The Craft meets Midsommar;
This story explores Druid and Celtic culture and mythology and their ties to American history, much like the Vikings, predating Columbus by nearly a thousand years. Told in a sometimes fun, comedic tone, but ultimately shocking with stunning visuals, an interesting setting, and compelling, diverse, and relatable characters.
Astrid Lafey, along with her boyfriend, William "Billy" Griggs are accompanied by their classmates and fellow members of Nu Sigma Delta, and Alpha Pi Kappa on a weekend getaway. Posing as a sorority, the Druid occultist lure the group of fraternity brothers to a remote location on the Appalachian plateau straddling the border between Tennessee and Georgia under the guise of a modern "SXSW, Coachella" outdoor festival to celebrate the pagan new year. A gateway between the realm of men and an ancient race of fae. By performing a ritual sacrifice during a rare astrological occasion that starts with the Lyrid meteor shower coincided by a lunar eclipse, an anomaly that will render Astrid exceptional powers, even amongst her supernatural peers. Her soul directly infused with a “sister” demon, one of the seven fae heads of state, The Queen of Witches. Not without cost however; she must accept her fate and give up that which she loves the most, Billy.
"-- you do an excellent job of writing all of your characters as real, living, breathing people, with a particularly refreshing ear for how people actually sound and talk. That opening scene of the guys grilling one another is excellent not only in capturing the way frat bros really interact but in letting us know precisely who all these people are, and from that moment, I was really hooked. This is a rare talent in horror, and something that I feel can really take you far..." -- Preston Fassel; writer, Our Lady of the Inferno (Contributor, Fangoria Magazine, Rue Morgue, Screem magazine, and Cinedump.com)
That is a great logline... until the last segment with the classmates. You didn't just give away the ending, did you?
Brad Mason not really, it's slightly misleading (as that's not the end of the story). I've thought about retooling it to "resulting in a disturbing and violent consequences." More vague....?
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Hi Dustin, it sounds interesting. I read the script and let you know how far I can go without stopping, which means how much it is engaging.
Oh, if you have a few minutes, please glance thru my script logline and see how much you like or dislike it so it’ll help me understand the overall response from audiences. Thanks
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If you watch a Sun of Sam documentary, or just research it, I'm sure you'll see a bunch of true to life relevant story features for you. Best of luck, great subject to pour yourself into. Just be careful if your a sensitive kid like me, can stick with you for a long time.
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