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LOCH AWE
By Stefan Alexander
When the arrival of a nefarious demoness turns a small Scottish town upside down, a brave agent working for a Vatican task force must race to stop her before she can awaken her master who is hellbent on destroying the world and releasing all of its inner demons.
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After a confrontation with a murderous apparition, Megan Luckett is pulled in by her mysterious and mythical law enforcement agency, the Golden Contra. A mysterious and shadowy protective force they vow to protect humanity from the dark forces of Rovina, their evil opposition, Megan is briefed and equipped for the considerable quest that faces her. To stop the terrifying and destructive apparition of their contemptibly evil opposition, the wicked Diabeth, she must outwit and outsmart, finding her way to a treasured and needed artifact first. Megan learns the hard way that Diabeth will stop at nothing to find what she is searching for. Located somewhere in remote Loch Awe their search takes on new complexions, it’s fate ultimately with the fate of civilization riding on it. The clock is ticking.
LOCH AWE
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Cool poster Stefan!
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Read the screenplay. Liked it!
Would cut all "sunddenly"s, and where needed replace the word with an other. Would replace 90% of the "wicked smile"s. I think it is "Gevin still lies motionless.." , not "lays" Check for all. Also a "smash cut" and a "cut to" you wrote at the left instead of at the right.
Best, Rutger
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Rutger, thanks a lot. Glad you liked the script. I did a word count for "wicked" and found wayyyyy to many of them ;-) ... Any ideas how to improve the logline after you read the script ?
Going to check the logline Stefan, and come back to you.
Logline is good Stefan. What is missing are clear stakes. What happens if the hero doesn't save the day -- it leads to Hell. World domination or destruction by pure godlike (=all powerfull,) Evil. Replace "friendish" with one (or two)word(s) that shows the stakes and your there.
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ah right .... added the stakes now