A white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression. He joins with an African-American vet and the local AA church in a quest for justice,
I like the concept, Michael Elliott. I think the first part of the logline could be smoother ("After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins").
Ok, Michael Elliott. Maybe something like: "After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins with an African-American vet and the local AA church to get reparations from his family."
That's pretty good. Keep in mind I've only written the logline. I posted it to test it out, get feedback on the concept. One thing...I hate the word "reparations".
That's a great idea, Michael Elliott. Testing out a concept before writing the script. I'd definitely watch this movie. Maybe change "to get reparations from his family" to "to get their money back from his family"
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Guys: I just came up with the concept this morning. Testing it with the logline. Thanks for participating.
I like the concept, Michael Elliott. I think the first part of the logline could be smoother ("After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins").
Why type of justice are they after?
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They want to be compensated. Either financially or return the land.
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Ok, Michael Elliott. Maybe something like: "After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins with an African-American vet and the local AA church to get reparations from his family."
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That's pretty good. Keep in mind I've only written the logline. I posted it to test it out, get feedback on the concept. One thing...I hate the word "reparations".
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That's a great idea, Michael Elliott. Testing out a concept before writing the script. I'd definitely watch this movie. Maybe change "to get reparations from his family" to "to get their money back from his family"
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When my writing gets me to that bridge, I'll know how to cross it.
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