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STOLEN LEGACY
By Michael Elliott

GENRE: Drama
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A white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression. He joins with an African-American vet and the local AA church in a quest for justice,

Marcos Fizzotti

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Kevin Johnson

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Michael Elliott

Guys: I just came up with the concept this morning. Testing it with the logline. Thanks for participating.

Maurice Vaughan

I like the concept, Michael Elliott. I think the first part of the logline could be smoother ("After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins").

Why type of justice are they after?

Matthew Parvin

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Michael Elliott

They want to be compensated. Either financially or return the land.

David Michael Kelly

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Maurice Vaughan

Ok, Michael Elliott. Maybe something like: "After a white Vietnam vet discovers his family's fortune was built from stealing black-owned farms during the Great Depression, he joins with an African-American vet and the local AA church to get reparations from his family."

Michael Elliott

That's pretty good. Keep in mind I've only written the logline. I posted it to test it out, get feedback on the concept. One thing...I hate the word "reparations".

Nate Rymer

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Maurice Vaughan

That's a great idea, Michael Elliott. Testing out a concept before writing the script. I'd definitely watch this movie. Maybe change "to get reparations from his family" to "to get their money back from his family"

Michael Elliott

When my writing gets me to that bridge, I'll know how to cross it.

Robin Gregory

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