just trying to nail a Logline for action/comedy I am nearing the end of. Just thought I'd take break from the script as I work to some details, and try Logline out. Please help.
An ugly duckling and unpopular FBI agent is given the task of protecting a very attractive witness in an organised crime case. After an attempt on the witness life, she takes him to her home town to hide but unbeknown to him, she also plans to make him her date at her high school reunion.
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Sounds like an interesting romcom!
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Your main character feels a bit passive and his witness more active and interesting. She's being hunted after all and feels extreme urgency to attend her high school reunion. What's his goal? Redemption? Is there more than one? You just need a little more information for clarification and I'm sure you'll get assistance from veteran writers here. Good luck to you. :)
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Pete Whiting I agree with Dan MaxXx. There are two plots. I suggest focusing on the main goal. Chaun Lee makes some great points too.
Here’s a logline template that might help: “After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the protagonist with an adjective) tries to _______ (goal of story) so ________ (stakes).”
Example: “After a group of dog criminals arrives in a small town, an impulsive dog sheriff defends a dog treat factory so they won’t steal food that’s meant for hungry dog families.”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline.
Example: “A dysfunctional couple works together to survive against bears after they crash on an abandoned road miles from help.”