Big update to my gothic thriller 'NOCTURNES' here is the new and improved poster and I shall also attach the new logline:
In the midst of post war London, a Detective must investigate a slew of grisly murders that seem to have been committed by an ancient entity.
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I like the new logline and poster, Ryan Avery. I suggest adding an adjective that describes the detective's personality and the stakes to the logline.
Maurice Vaughan In the midst of post war London a hard-boiled female Detective must investigate a slew of grisly murders that seem to have been committed by an ancient entity. As the bodies start to pile up it is only a matter of time before a crumbling city is brought to ruin.
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I think that's long for a logline, Ryan Avery. It's 50 words.
Here's a logline suggestion: "In postwar London, a hard-boiled detective investigates murders that seem to be committed by an ancient entity and races to stop the being from killing more people." That's 27 words.
I tried to add "before a crumbling city is brought to ruin" in the logline. I'm not sure how important that is to the plot, but you might not need it in the logline. Is the city being brought to ruin or people's lives the main stakes?