Any advice on this one? Does it paint the picture?
COLD MORNING LIGHT - Sci-Fi Thriller
In the near future, when an investigative journalist discovers mind-altering AI is being used to mask impoverished living conditions to entire populations, she must battle the elite corporatists profiteering from the conspiracy.
Comps: The Truman Show meets The Matrix
Thank you!
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It paints very well, but the gold is in the battle. Maybe more about that?
An investigative journalist, discovering a worldwide harmful use of AI, creates a way to blackmail all profiteering corporatists, but is cancelled and must try her second best surprise.
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This logline fits my logline style pretty close, so I think I could offer a tweak. Also your image looks like it has the protagonists kids, thus suggesting personal stakes, which is very good but that's missing from the logline.
My version:
"When an investigative journalist discovers mind-altering AI is being used to mask mass poverty, she must protect her children and expose the conspiracy."4 people like this
Tremendous concept GJ Harvey! Will have to give proper thought to the concept, in promoting adequate respects to the matters involved!
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"The Truman Show meets The Matrix" I'd watch this movie based on that alone, GJ Harvey! Yeah, I think your logline paints the picture.
I think your logline only needs a little work. Here's a logline suggestion: In the near future, when an investigative journalist discovers mind-altering AI is being used to mask impoverished living conditions to entire populations, she battles the elite corporatists profiteering from the conspiracy ______ (the stakes).
But you could take off "in the near future" to give the logline a better flow.
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I would avoid the word “corporatist.”
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Try this:
"In the near future, an journalist discovers that corporations are using mind-altering A.I. to mask the country's impoverished living and working conditions, and the elite, who live off the profit, try to eliminate her before can she upset the status quo."
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These are awesome suggestions and I'm cherry-picking from all - thank you :-)
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I like the original write up. No offense to the suggestions below but did you got it. stick with it!
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when an AI woman discovers she and her family only exist to mask human corporate greed, she enlists an investigative journalist to help her unravel the truth. (I know I changed the protag and the story but doesn't it sound interesting that the AI is grieving her nonexistant children?)
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I love the title!
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I would remove the sepia tone from the picture, cause it connotes warm, not cold, light, and add a very pale bluish-purple tint instead. Would also add some air between the lines of the title.
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GJ Harvey as the title suggests cold morning light. color palette should be cold. Blueish. This palette also match with the concept of Sci-fi Thriller
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Hi GJ Harvey it sounds like an interesting concept. I’d like the logline to convey a more of our hero’s emotional inner struggle - what does she overcome? Without that it may feel a little bleak.
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the poster is missing the illegal immigrant nanny with a heart of gold.
Logline: Desperate to win the pulitzer for journalism, an ambitious Upper East Side single mom must visit the South Bronx after a mysterious AI plague kills poor people.