Here is the logline for our just-completed screenplay, Jasmine Absolute. Would you request this script? We'd welcome your feedback, please. A young African-American ad exec’s life spins out of control, and she must overcome her resulting meth addiction--and its tragic consequences--if she is to open a community center honoring her slain brother.
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Virtual Pitchfest?
Has anyone had any experience with VPF? It purports to connect writers with actual industry professionals for possible representation or sale of their scripts. We've got a few pitches left on our current run. Just wondering about others' take on this service, and any positive/negative experiences.
I have used VPF. It contains specific needs and wants by Producers,Managers and Agents. You can also research before you select. Normally I get 10-20% success rate for script requests.
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Just discovered this site today, and it looks like I've found "my people." It seems to be a great, supportive community here. I live in the Atlanta area. I recently self-published a novel, and my co-author and I are currently shopping the screenplay adaptation. I am also looking for employment in th...
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Nice one Rich.....
Some very nice responses here, and food for thought. I think Alle nailed the real idea that we're trying to convey at the core of the story, though: the antagonists are the meth addiction and her inse...
Expand commentSome very nice responses here, and food for thought. I think Alle nailed the real idea that we're trying to convey at the core of the story, though: the antagonists are the meth addiction and her insecurities. This being a drug story, there ARE several bad guys, especially her supplier, but the challenge, the main CONFLICT, of the story, is the struggle with the addiction--how it appears to make her feel like a queen at first, before it almost destroys everything. My thought process--cobbled together from several sources over the years--in constructing my logline was: "(person/personality we meet in act I) is trying/compelled to do X, but Y is standing in his/her way. " While I love, love, love Ami's succinct take, our main character doesn't start out as a meth addict. Her fall from where she starts is a vital story element. Her addiction is the nemesis, rather than a character trait she starts with.
I think what is so great about these "feedback" requests is that it gives the writer more options in wording and ideas on how to refine things a bit. Also having strangers with no idea about the scrip...
Expand commentI think what is so great about these "feedback" requests is that it gives the writer more options in wording and ideas on how to refine things a bit. Also having strangers with no idea about the script (what a potential producer will be) giving honest feedback. Every producer will be looking for something different and come from a different background, so getting a variety of opinions is great - even if you don't change it at all. At least it's given you something different to think about. Everyone's opinions matter, because the logline should suck the reader in, producer or not.
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Ami, I think you're right. It also provides insight into process. If writers started with the logline, and polished the basis of their story until the logline crackled before writing the screenplay, i...
Expand commentAmi, I think you're right. It also provides insight into process. If writers started with the logline, and polished the basis of their story until the logline crackled before writing the screenplay, it would result in much less rewriting and much better stories. We tend to do it the other way around, and only find out after the screenplay is written while struggling with the logline, that maybe the conflict should have been more compelling and immediate.
Alle, it seems like in the time it took you to read a 1000 bad scripts you could have written a couple good ones yourself ready for production this year, instead of waiting for something that looks like may never come your way. Make your own destiny happen, that's what I'm doing. :-)