Sweet 16(mm) - Phil's Lounge Discussions

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5-DUE0rw2lw

In this case your logline intentionally raises a question that cries for different answers of its potential audience..

In other words... I'm not even sure that it is the logline/tagline that sold (optioned) your screenplay Phillip. For me it is the contradiction of someone surviving a deathcamp to end up fighting a war and taking lives. That's the painful irony. That's the hook that sold the story!

It's about the question of who's right and who's wrong. It's about the idea that 'the truth is in the eyes of the beholder. More general, it's also about the universal question: must men weighs war, take lives, for turf?

Your story lets me think of the tragic and ironic 'switch' in "The boy with the striped pyjama" and the irony of the contradiction in terminus in the Italian holocaust movie "La vita è bella". These sort of movies automatically set of a discussion about what is not 'literally' said'.

A lot of people are going to see "And on the seventh day" so they are able to take part in that discussion. To make their point, whatever that is.

It's about having a great idea and a solid reason for bringing that idea to the screen.

And On The Seventh Day.....?

Good job!

Nope. Leading or rhetorical Qs in loglines or blurbs are passe and irritating.

But Rutger Oosterhoff re: the Inktip article tip #3, it really does pay off drafting a half-dozen candidate loglines. I once worked up a Mad Libs-style template and tried various combos of different phraseologies and synonyms before settling in on a tight, low-wordcount final version.

I asked this question once to a teacher I had - he said no! The longline was the story. The question was the audience trap. Or the theatrical line.

Hi, Phil. Welcome to Stage 32.

Thank you! I've been here fot some time already but not everybody has the gift of "words" - I guess YOU know! ;) Ciao!

Hey Sweet, this is Beth from the Stage 32 team. I just wanted to let you know I moved your post from Cinematography to Introduce Yourself, as it fits much better there. Let me know if you have any questions, and all the best to you!

Beth, I'm sorry, I wasn't aware there was "Intro yslf" among the job descriptions, but great, thanks! :D

Hello. Phil.

No,.. not if you are writing your ten (10) pgs. a day minimum~ [Stephen King- On Writing]. I would personally the most grueling the probably is my re-write and of course all of us writers experience the old writers block from script to script. Yeah, but that re-write “oh boy!” Here is a list of cosmetics for a really great screenplay I usually tend to stick to and most of these sub-categories, on screenplay production are fundamental for expediency as well as persistence in the development of the writer and his work.

Dan Guardino Agreed! I believe the same thing.

Could be. It all depends on the size, the genre and how many rewrites. Also, if you need to do extensive research, you also need to take that in account. For me a first draft of a short usually takes a week and that's about 15 pages. But if you want to be really good, then take all the time you need.

The reason it takes so long for people to write something is that most people don't have a story. Wait, what!? This is how it happens: they start writing and figuring out things as they write it. Then you meander into never-never land going in circles - it's called "stuck in the Second Act" (Syndrome). Why? Because you don't know how to end it! So this is what you need to do before you pick up your pencil, or start pounding on the keyboard - know exactly "how will the story end". Then work backwards, you'll whip out stories/scripts in weeks. As a corollary, if the ending is mediocre or just run of the mill ho-hum, don't write it - change the ending until it's great, then write it. My opinion only, of course; and YMMV :)

If you have a story and know the characters it will take you two weeks. I just wrote my 65 page TV pilot in eight days. I wrote my first feature film 99 pages in two weeks.

the sound guy makes sense, I always do this too when i am on the ball-"On set as a recordist, I always record 1-2 minutes of room tone in each setup for editing later." this is good reminder for the future as i do all the roles often in filmmaking, camera, audio, etc.

Cool Edit Pro (now Adobe Audtion) was always my choice for recording or fixing sound. Although SoundForge came in a close second. I've done extensive recording of audio, much more so than any video. There are ways to kill the noise floor (gate) or keep normal levels (turn the AGC - OFF) . There are so many ways to effect audio nowadays. Pop and click filters, sibilance filters, Autotune? Noise floor sampling and inversion can really take your audio to new levels.

After so many really great comments I realize, I wasn't able to describe what my initial problem was. ouch! - Earlier on in an answer to James H. I used the image of the lens and the scratch, but now I know that even if it made you laugh it wasn't understood. That's why I made a grafic now to explain the issue. It is about "lowering the over-all quality of the sound to maintain continuity" or "am I unaware of a technical trick you might know". The grafic is here: http://europhoto.us/s16/noise-floor.jpg My point in the picture is this: in the number 1 pic we habe the spoken audio with a given noise level. In the edited version the non-continiuous "ffff" is perceived as some kind of breath. We are aware of it because it is not continuous. In the number 2 picture we will no longer hear the breathing of the noise but the entire film will now have a "FFFF" layer and the over-all quality will be lowered quite a bit. The idea is to give the green "stripe" on the picture a quality of it's own (like traffic in a city, or a the breaking waves in a shot at the shore) But this is exactly my problem: In a horror movie, in an apartment at night, in a scene without music I cannor imagine a low level other-than-noise-sound to be that green layer without drawing attention or breaking the "4th wall". I hope I got the picture across to you and maybe you have some ideas on a possible noise source that could go "undiscovered" but maybe it's just exactly so: Lower the quality to a sustainable level, period. But again, thanks a bunch to you all ! Cheers, Phil

i think your answer here is to do a voice over. It is very common for the actors to repeat their lines an an otherwise silent location for just that scene to achieve the silent background for effect.

What they are recording is called "room tone" or ambience. There is a difference. Room tone is the specific sound of a location by the way it's shaped. It's the natural sound of a location. Every location has a natural sound when everyone stays quiet and listens. The protocol is, sound department asks for everyone to "be quiet while they record room tone", about 30 seconds worth . Then in post, it's used to add a 3 dimensional quality for the overall sound of a scene especially with dialogue. Particularly, to "bridge" cuts together. Also, if there was differences in ambience between shots it's used to level or balance out that difference. It's hard to describe here in a post but better if you can experience it. Here is a good example: http://vimeo.com/24028843