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BECOMING

BECOMING
By Matthew Parvin

GENRE: Romance, Drama
LOGLINE:

Two people arrive at an antique bookstore to begin an affair. During a torrential storm engulfing the city Cammie and Aiden must confront the tempest outside and the turmoil within to truly know what their hearts want, and if what they truly want is each other.

SYNOPSIS:

Cammie Holden is unhappy. She arrives at Second Circle Books with a strenuous job in human resources that demands an increasing amount of her time and energy. Her marriage to her husband Arthur is slipping away like raindrops through a sewer grate. The couple’s two sons, Bruce (15) and Tyler (11) are crumbling under the onslaught of puberty. But Cammie is a bibliophile; her great passion is books. Worlds of literature she can escape to inhabit and find things she lacks in her waking life, passion, and adventure. On this day, Cammie approaches this emporium with something she’s only ever had in her books: a potential lover.

Aiden Rohm is unhappy. A relationship to the younger Alizee was exciting and passionate but has now fallen into a dangerous malaise of comfort and resentment. His new promotion to the head of human resources at his job should be exciting but provides little relief from the monotony of his life. He only respite from the drudgery is the world of a bibliophile; his books add excitement, passion, and freedom to his mundane existence. But today, he pulls into the parking lot of Second Circle Antique Books with something else on his mind: another woman.

Second Circle Antique Books is an unhappy place. The manager, Herman Ost, longs for an easy existence. Clerk Fanta Mitchell desires an employer who values instead of ogles her. Will Underhill wants to be paid on time. No one, however, is getting what they yearn for.

This bookstore, in this city, is about to experience storms. As these cars pull into the parking lot, heavy clouds gather overhead and will soon unleash a tempest upon them. Within the building, several other storms are about to be unleashed. Cammie must weigh her newfound passion with the embers of a dying love. Aiden must decide between the hope of a new love and the memory of a love gone wrong. Herman, Fanta and Will have to wrestle with the disappointments, failed expectations, and frustrations of each other.

After this deluge is over, nothing will be the same.

BECOMING

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Amazing Kacee

character names do not go into a logline. What is the goal, objective, why now, attributes of the characters, etc?

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Marcos Fizzotti

Hello Matthew, here's a suggestion: 'During a torrential storm, these two people seek shelter in an antique bookstore. Now, they have to confront the tempest outside and the turmoil within to truly discover if it's each other they really want.'

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Jenean McBrearty

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Jenean McBrearty

At an antique bookstore, during a torrential storm, two people confront the inner turmoil of not being sure if what they truly want is each other. (The log line seemed a little long and clumsy, so I worked with a shorter, one sentence version. You can introduce the other stuff in the synopsis.)

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Mary Kay LaBrie

I like the logline, but I agree with Jenean McBrearty . Jenean, I write romantic comedy. Maybe you can help me with my loglines. I'm rusty as I'm just getting back into the game.

Marcel Nault Jr.

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Marcel Nault Jr.

The logline is a little bit long, I agree. But, the concept is there: the unrequited love, the forbidden love rather during dark times.

Marcel Nault Jr.

Also, I'm hoping your characters go beyond just "unhappy".

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Jenna Hunt

Also, in your Power Point presentation, there is a glaring typo. Otherwise, you have done a fantastic, thorough, well-thought out presentation. Best wishes!

Jenna Hunt

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Jenna Hunt

Whether arguing with your boss, not you boss

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