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SAVING SUMMER
By Erin Leigh
When a boy from an upper-middle-class family falls for a girl in a rehabilitation facility accused of murdering her best friend, his investigation into the crime forces him to confront the entitlement of his own privileged lifestyle.
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A boy from an upper-middle-class family falls for a girl in a rehabilitation facility accused of murdering her best friend, but the more he learns about the events surrounding the mysterious death, the less sense it all makes, until his investigation takes a dramatic turn, sending him spiraling deeper into the egotism and entitlement edging his own privileged lifestyle.
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Hi Erin! I'd recommend changing the wording a bit to add some more action and tension. For example, "When a boy from a privileged family falls for a girl in a rehabilitation facility accused of murder, his investigation into the crime forces him to confront the entitlement of his own lifestyle." Adding some more specifics as to where the story is going makes the logline more eye catching as well.
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This was super helpful, Molly! Thanks!
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